高考英语写作最后冲刺训练、点评和猜题05(含解析)

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2015届高考英语写作最后冲刺训练、点评和猜题 05（含解析）

练习一

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Three Umbrellas

Sally was a college student in London. She wanted to buy her mother a nice and usef ul birthday present, but not too expensive.

One day after a quick and simple lun ch, she went shopping. Having looked for half an hour, she came across a shop selling umbrellas at a good price. So she decided to take one.

She thought, “Mom can carry it when she is wearing clothes of any color.” Then s he bought a lovely black umbrella and took it to school with her until her class finished.

On her way home in the train that evening she felt hungry, so she went to the buffet car. She left the black umbrella above her seat. But when she got back, she found it was gone!

Sally burst into tears. The other passengers felt very sorry for her and asked what was wrong. When she explained the black umbrella she had bought for her mother had disappeared, and that she had to get off at the next station, the thr ee other passengers asked her for her mother’s address so that they could send the umbrella to her in case someone returned it after Sally got off the train.

The next week, Sally got a letter from her mother saying “Thank you very much for your lovely pres ents, but why did you send me three black umbrellas?”

[写作内容]

1.以约30个词概括短文的要点;

2.然后以约120个词写一篇短文，并包括如下要点:

(1)所读故事对你的启发;

(2)记叙一个与该故事中Sally或陌生人的行为相类似的故事;

(3)你对亲人的感恩或对他人善心的感激。

[写作要求]

1.在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中

的句子；

2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

3.标题自定。

[评分标准]

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

【思路点拨】

1.概括短文内容：浏览全文再根据文章标题，我们不难发现，这篇文章的主要内容是：文章前四段讲的是：一个名叫Sally的大学生为母亲买了一把伞作为生日礼物，可是在火车上给弄丢了；后面两段讲的是：三个陌生乘客给予她的帮助：悄悄给她母亲送去了三把伞；

2.记叙一个与该故事中Sally或陌生人的行为相类似的故事(两者择其一);

3.你对亲人的感恩或对他人善心的感激(两者择其一)；

4.自定标题。

【参考答案】

Love our mother

Sally, a college student, bought her mother an umbrella as a birthday present but lost it in the train. Moved by her kindness and respect for her mother, some passengers in the train later sent her mother three umbrellas.

Sally loved her moth er and remembered her mother’s birthday. As a 17-year-old girl, I love my mother very much as well. I send my mother flowers on Mother’s Day. Last year, on mother’s 45th birthday, I bought my mother a very good comb from store. When I showed it to my mother and told her it was good for her health to comb her hair often, she burst into tears and then smiled to m y father and me. Never had I imagined that a simple gift would make her so moved.

Mother’s love is the most precious in the world. I think we ca n show our love for our mother by doing small things. What is most important is to our love every day.

【范文评析】

1.范文在概括短文内容时，没有直接引用原文中的句子，符合题目设定的要求。一个并列句“Sally(人物), a college student(身份), bought her mother an umbrella as a birthday present but lost it

in the train(所发生的事情)”和一个简单句“Moved by her kindness and respect for her mother(过去分词短语用作原因状语), some passengers in the train later sent her mother three umbrellas(所发生的事情)”就把事情的来龙去脉交代得清清楚楚，很是简洁；

2.“Sally loved her mother and remembered her mother’s birthday”明确向读者传递了这样的信息：叙述一个与该故事中Sally的行为相类似的故事。因此，作者恰到好处地把文章标题定为“I love our mother”。这一段作者特别注意了动词的时态：用了一般现在时和一般过去时。“as well, I send sb. sth., buy sb. sth. from some place, show sth. to sb., be good for, burst into tears, smile to sb. ”等等词汇的运用读来令人亲切。倒装句“Never had I imagined that a simple gift would make her so moved.”更是为文章锦上添花；

3.最后一段使得文章首尾呼应，对文章主题进行了升华。最后一句“What is most important is to our love every day”是神来之笔。

附：从另一个角度所写的作文

Love and get loved

Some strangers sent Sally’s mother three umbrellas after they saw S ally in tears because she had lost the umbrella she would send her mother as a birthday present.

From the story of three umbrellas, we can see that people will love you in return if you give love to others. When I was 16 years old, I was in hospital for a small operation. It was difficult for me to reach out my hands for drinks or food. An old lady who was taking care of her husband in the room often came to my bedside to help me. Furthermore, she often told funny stories and made my days there full of joy. She prepared delicious soup for me and her husband. I have been very grateful to her for all that she did. Last year, at her 56th birthday, I sent her a big birthday cake and spent a good day at her home. Love is a two-way street. Love others, and then you will get loved.

练习二

“No Thanksgiving would be no virtue”(没有感恩就没有真正的美德)。如今社会上一些人缺乏感恩之心，少数人甚至在父母年老体弱时都不愿意赡养。请你结合自己的实际，谈几点父母值得你感恩的地方，以及将来你会做些什么来报答父母的养育之恩。

注意：1.短文的开头已给出，但不计入词数。

2.词数100左右

3.感恩：thanksgiving

Not only do our parents give us life, but they also give us endless love and support, always sharing our happiness and sorrow.

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【思路点拨】

本文考查提纲作为。首先，考生要仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点：结合自己的实际，谈几点父母值得你感恩的地方，以及将来你会做些什么来报答父母的养育之恩；也就是说，本文主要写要学会感恩，主要是对父母感恩，为什么要感谢父母？怎样感谢？这些都要要在文章中表现出来。另外要注意提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。最后，要根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；语言表达要符合英语习惯。

【参考答案】

Not only do our parents give us life, but they also give us endless love and support, always sharing our happiness and sorrow.

I’m very grateful to my parents. They give me so much love and spare no efforts to support me. I still remember once I was seriously ill, they were so worried and almost accompanied me the whole night. Now I’m in Senior 3. Luckily for me, my parents can understand my stressful condition and often communicate with me with encouraging words. Furthermore, they give me enough personal sp ace, which I appreciate so much.

What I should do now is to study hard. When I grow up, I will try my best to make my parents live a happy life.

练习三

感恩，是我们生活中永恒的话题。假设你校正在举行一场有关“感恩”的演讲比赛，请你在“父母、老师、朋友” 中选择一个感恩对象，写一篇英语演讲稿参加比赛。

内容要点如下：1.为何感恩；

2.如何感恩。

注意：1.词数120左右；

2.演讲稿中不能出现与本人相关的信息；

3.演讲稿的开头与结尾已为你拟好，不计入总词数。

Good afternoon, everyone! it’s a great ho nor to have the opportunity to be with you today. The topic of my speech is “Thank you, …”

Thank you for listening.

【思路点拨】

本篇体裁为演讲稿，属于提纲式作文。写好提纲式作文的关键是认真审题和分析所给的提纲，因此考生首先要认真阅读前面的提示，认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系，然后确定文章的主题、文体、人称和时态。根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来，注意主次分明，详略得当。语言力求准确、简洁。同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有一定的连贯性。考生必须认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。本文根据写作要求应该分成两部分(因为首段已经给出)：

第一部分选择一个感恩的对象，阐明感恩的原因

在“父母、老师、朋友” 中选择一个感恩对象，我们有理由相信考生首选的对象就是“父母，尤其是母亲”，因为对“为何感恩母亲，如何感恩母亲”考生有话可说。但是要把“为何感恩母亲”这一部分写好也并非易事。所以考生要有真情实感，不要无病呻吟。

第二部分说明感恩的方式

在“如何感恩母亲”方面，考生不妨可以这样来考虑：作为学生，就要用刻苦学习实现梦想来报答母亲；从一些生活小事做起来考虑，我们能为母亲做点什么来感恩母亲等等。

【参考答案】

Good afternoon, everyone! it’s a great honor to have the opportunity to be with you today. Th e topic of my speech is “Thank you, mum”

Like many of you, my life has been blessed with a mother who is a source of unconditional love. My mum is an ordinary housewife while I highly appreciate her kind consideration. She keeps me company, cooks me tasty dinners, and makes my room as clean as possible. On top of that, whenever I get upset, she listens to me and comforts me until I have cheered up. I’m fortunate to have