2011考研钻石包过班英语笔记整理9月11日

高分作文标志

1、是否长短句交叉；

2、用词是否恰当，准确，形象，尽量使用能够吸引阅卷老师眼球的闪光词；

3、关键词是否换用，切勿老用重复词；

下面给出写好一篇作文的注意事项：

1.适当用被动代替主动，这样能更客观的反映事实, 句子开头不要总是用we / I (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. )举个经典结尾It is ,therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. Thus，its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.

2.善于使用插入语，比如说把副词、连接词等，作插入语放在中间，一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。

如however / therefore /for example/I believe 做插入语放在中间，一般放在动词，助动词后，两边分别加上逗号。

比如说：Other individuals, however, take the attitude that …

3. 一定要学会换词，换形象，具体的代替太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good, bad , many, thing, think,

people, opinion 等等)比如上面例子中，applicable代替proper, approaches代替ways, implement代替carry out, sharpen one’s competitive edge代替enhance one’s competitiveness(提高某物竞争力)

下面举一篇例子，给各位钻石班会员共勉！

Computer and I By Simmy

I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.

exceedingly 替换very

thrilling 替换exciting

sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替换sb. be interested in sth.

google 替换search

an army of 替换a lot of

The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!

The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一个精彩句型，用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情；

Increasing popularity 替换more and more popular

Coincident with …非常地道的词汇，表达“与…一致”的意思，替换With …Advancement 替换development

Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替换enter into

Current ( currently )替换now

Appeal to sb. 替换sb. be interested in sth.

Growing individuals 替换more and more people

It is no exaggeration to say 经典句型，说某事是毫不夸张的

For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.

For a start 替换To begin with

We can, freely, search 用了插入语的写作手法

our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被动

Additionally 替换In addition / Besides

Deliver 替换send

There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence ,***, porn pictures, A V-films emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.

There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, 这个句子有三个精彩之处，首先There is no denying that这个句型，还有however作为插入语，function in the disservice of 替换do harm to

Emerging 代替appearing ( fading 代替disappearing )

Net citizen 网民，属于精彩用词

As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people' lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should ,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.

No garden has no weeds 替换Every coin has two sides

Computers do play ，do 强调

Positive 替换important / good 等

A slice of 替换a part of

Unfavorable 替换bad

Impacts 替换effects / influences

We should, therefore, take advantage of …使用插入语

Fruits (而且fruits 用的非常形象，merits/ virtues) 替换advantage ( defects 替换disadvantage )

Facet 替换aspect

各位，上面的作文里有这么多精彩的闪光点，作文怎么会不得高分呢！

以下是我当年总结的30个最经典的替换词，请各位一定要把下面的我总结的这些背下来！！

1.individuals,characters, folks代替(people ,persons)

2: positive, favorable, rosy(美好的)，promising

(有希望的)，perfect, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding代替good

3:dreadful, unfavorable, poor, adverse(有害的)代替bad

如果bad做表语，可以有be less impressive代替

eg.An army of college students indulge themselves in playing games, enjoying

romance with girls/boys or killing time passively in their dorms. When it approaches to graduation ,as a result, they find their academic records are less impressive.

4.(an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of ,many,if not most)代替many.

注：用many, if not most 一定要小心，many后一定要有词。

Eg. Many individuals, if not most, harbor the idea that….同理用most, if not all ,代替most.

5: a slice of, quiet a few , several代替some

6:harbor the idea that, take the attitude that,

hold the view that, it is widely shared that,

it is universally acknowledged that)替think

(因为是书面语，所以要加that)

7:affair ,business ,matter 代替thing

8: shared 代common

9.reap huge fruits 代替get much benefit )

10:for my part ,from my own perspective 代替in my opinion

11:Increasing(ly),growing 代替more and more( 注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词，副词用increasingly.

Eg.sth has gained growing popularity.

Sth is increasingly popular with the advancement of sth.

12.little if anything, 或little or nothing代替hardly

13..benefitial rewarding代替helpful be beneficial of

14.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser, 代替customer

15.exceedingly,extremely 代替very

16.hardly unnecessary, hardly inevitable ... 代替necessary,

inevitable

17.sth appeals to sb, sth exerts a tremendous fascination on sb 代替sb take interest in

18.capture one's attention代替attract one's attention.

19.facet,demension,sphere代aspect

20.be indicative of ,be suggesteive of ,be fearful of代indicate, suggest ,fear

21.give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger 代替cause.

22. There are several reasons behind sth 代替..reasons for sth

23.desire 代替want.

24.pour attention into 代替pay attention to

25.bear in mind that 代替remember

26. enjoy, possess 代替have(注意process是过程的意思)

27. interaction代替communication

28.frown on sth代替be against , disagree with sth

29.to name only a few, as an example代替for example

30. next to/virtually impossible,代替nearly impossible