2012上海高考英语作文评析及范文

2012上海高考英语作文评析及范文

又一年高考落下了帷幕。今年的英语作文题较有新意——假设作者上周在一所小学观摩两堂绘画课，以日记的形式描写两幅小朋友的绘画作品，并谈谈从中获得的启发。其中一幅是小孩用脚蘸了颜料在画布上踩脚印，另一幅图是小孩用画笔在纸上画山水。

这不是一篇容易写的文章。同样是图片作文，今年的难度要高于2010年的《课堂一角》。首先，提供的图片有两张，提高了对于描写的要求。高考英语作文已经不再仅仅考察学生的议论能力，它有些借鉴中文作文，要求学生夹叙夹议。在叙述中，如果只是平铺直叙那显然得不到高分。描写的关键在于捕捉事物的特征，而高考作文往往要求学生在短短几句话中描写到位，这其实是不低的要求。在笔者看来，精妙地运用几个动词是这部分制胜之道。相反，要少用形容词和副词。马克吐温曾说：“当你看到一个形容词时，杀死它。”虽然这样说不无夸张，但好的动词确实能让文章充满力量，生机勃勃。如，以下是笔者为2010年高考作文原创的范文，请看这里的描写：

In this picture, the pupils are all beaming. They are scrambling to answer a question as if they have full confidence in themselves. The excitement and the eagerness to participate gush out of the picture.

This is reminiscent of my own classes at primary school. At that time, we each wore the same innocent smile, fought with a jungle of other hands, and single-mindedly believed our answer would impress the teachers most. I enjoyed these classes for they sparked my interest in many subjects and taught me that competition could be fun.

其次，图片的含义并不是显而易见的，需要看出每张图背后的意思并将两张图结合起来说。2010年的考题也是开放性的，但相对来说学生比较容易展开。可以具体分析为什么小学生会积极举手发言，而年龄越大课堂参与感越弱。如以下这样论述：

Such fond memories they are! Unfortunately, as we grow older, we are increasingly reticent in class. There are many possible reasons for this change. It may be puberty that is to blame because we dread losing face. It may be that our body and mind are straitjacketed by the education system. It may simply be humans’ desire to conform to their peers—“Since nobody is putting their hand up, why should I?”

Whatever the reason, our carefree and innocent years at primary school is a reminder that we are always children at heart. Behind that cool facade, we can still be enthusiastic and committed to what we love doing.

而今年的考题可以表达的含义则更为多元。有些学生认为这两幅画体现了传统和创新优缺点，笔者并不完全同意。单单从创作的角度来说，用脚画画谈不上创新，脚印的堆砌也构不成艺术。而用画笔画山水也不尽然都是传统。因此，用这两幅画分别代表传统和创新不具有很大的说服力。既然话题是开放性的，绘画可以只是个表象，在绘画背后的寓意则更深刻。一个个脚印可以代表脚踏实地，不拒绝做一些朴实而基础的事。相反，山水画代表着鸿鹄之志，代表着对未来的憧憬。而这两种特质应该是一对矛盾统一。就像Facebook的创始人马克?扎克伯格说的一样：“把眼睛盯着繁星，把双脚踩在地上。”显然，这样的立意更耐人寻味。

再次，文章要求考生用日记的方式写，对熟悉了议论文、图表作文和书信等较正式文体的广大考生来说，是个不小的挑战。即如何体现出日记的风格，保持一种真实、清新、内省的笔调，而不是一副架势十足的虚伪样子。但是，作为应试作文需要有一定的规范。考生可能会疑惑是否可以使用俚语、习语、缩写或网络流行词。确实，笔者认为既要考虑日记的特性又要兼顾考试的规范是一件令人纠结的事。尽管如此，还是可以通过一些手段，如将较正式的it is缩略为it’s（面对自己，我们无需如此正式）或运用如would be better off这样较口语化的表达。

在本次高考结束，笔者又特地创作一篇范文，供读者参考。笔者水平有限，如有错误，请不吝指正。

范文：

Date: June 8, 2012

Last week, I sat in on two painting classes at a primary school. In one class a student dipped her feet in ink and made a painting out of footprints. By contrast, the same student used a brush to make a breath-taking landscape painting—so vivid that one could almost smell the refreshing rivers and hear the chirping birds.

Though standing in stark contrast, the two paintings both intrigued me. In fact, they reminded me of what Facebook founder Mark Zuckerberg said, “Ke ep your eyes on the stars and your feet on the ground.” It’s this maxim on success that lends insight into the two paintings. The first painting represents that we should remain grounded and be cautious of being carried away with temporary success. A kite stays afloat because it’s attached to a reel; otherwise it will instantly lose its balance before eventually crashing into the ground. So it is with us.

However, success requires more than being simply down-to-earth, with a lofty ideal being another crucial factor. So grand was the scenery portrayed in the second painting that it embodied the reach of our dreams. Instead of ignoring the gleam of light, the spark of wisdom that flashes across our mind and worshipping the luster of the sky of geniuses, we’d be better off trusting that the gleam and the spark will one day shine as brightly as a search light if we have faith in ourselves.

The paintings taught me to dream big and act small. And I believe, by doing so, the warm light of success will cascade into my life.

2012上海高考英语阅读部分解析

2012-06-19 17:03 作者：上海新东方优能中学部扈骏来源：上海新东方学校字号：T|T

摘要：今天，为大家分享2012上海高考英语阅读部分解析，供大家学习交流。

65---68

65. 此题考查细节题，根据文中表述“He raised 70,000 for the British charit y, Oxfarm”答案为B。

66.此题为词义判定题，需上下文找相关线索，得出“epic”大概意思，通过文章内容“returned from an 18,000-mile, around –the-world bicycle trip”以及最后段主人公在行程中的众多困难，可推得选择B，very long and difficult.

67. 此题仍然为细节题，文中提到having to cycle into a headwind on a road th at crosses the south of Australia. 可得答案为C，managed to ride against the win d in Australia.

68.此题为大意推断题，根据文意可推断，White历经艰险单仍然完成自己目标，具备determined的特质，选择D

69---71

69. 此题为细节题，根据文章 Sydney Ferries or CityRail services ( limited ar ea ), so you can go to every corner of this. 可见答案为D，CityRail service.

70. 此题为细节判断题，找准文章相关信息，解题很容易。All SydneyPasses includ

e a free Airport Express inward trip before starting your 3, 5 or 7 days, and t he return trip is valid for 2 months from the first day your ticket was used. 答案为A: save fares from and to the airport.

71. 此题仍为细节运用，根据文中表格所示，可组成一个family（mother+college），免费带个4---16岁小孩，5天是300元；还有个孩子是4---16岁之间，60元，4岁下那个小孩免费，最终为360，选择C

72---75

72. 此题需要仔细阅读文章后进行推断，也可用排除法选择。如文中所提到The typi cal father wanted to be left alone to enjoy some peace and quiet等，很明显的体现了C，答案为C：find a escape from reality.

73.此题为词汇判定，需从文中找出相关信息组合（也可用排除法推断）来定位oxyto cin的含义，While men also secrete oxytocin, its effects are reduced by male hor mones. Women are far more likely than men to seek social contact when they are feeling stressed. They may phone relatives or friends, or ask directions if the y are lost. 由此两段可看出D为正确答案：oxytocin has more of an effect on women than on men.

74.此题为文意推断，需要信息组合得出答案，文中多处提到：While men often reac t to stress in the fight-or-fight response, women often have another kind of re action which could be called “tend and befriend” The typical father wanted to be left alone to enjoy some peace and quiet. For a typical mother, coping wi th a bad day at work meant focusing her attention on her children and their nee ds. 由此可见性别不同，处理压力方式也不同，选择C: Biological difference lead to different behavioral responses to stress.

75.大意推断，推荐大家用名词分析法判断，读完文章，主题一定是man，woman和st ress。所以A和B正确，然后讲的是克服压力而非遭受压力的副作用，故答案选择A: How men and women get over stress.

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76：段落明显提到家长很多都认为提早阅读对日后成功很关键，但是作者提出其实意义不大，可见选择F: Whether reading early promises later achievements.

77. 段落说明了美国孩子上学时间，但很多学校会进行更早教育，孩子一旦早期没有成效，家长和孩子都很失落，故选择A: When a child should learn to read

78. 段落提到二种有效方法帮助孩子学习，即whole language 和 phonic，由此可见选择E: What is the best way to teach a child reading.

79. 此段落提到了对孩子reading的方法，作者进行了介绍，可见选择D: How you p repare a young child for reading

80. 段落说到了孩子一旦上学后，reading会难，会遇到困难，可进行专业分析并想法克服，可见选择C: What if a child has reading problems

81---84

81. 此题为短语判定题，先找到相关段落：The pattern of age segregation in Ame rican society did not become usual until the beginning of the industrialized so ciety. Changes in the workplace separated children from adults. 答案可写为：You nger children and adults

82. 此题问两点，写时要注意字数控制,线索如下:

1. School reform efforts during the nineteenth century, which resulted in age-segregated schools and grades, have reduced the amount of time adolescents spend with younger children.

2. Finally, the changes in population are considered a factor that may hav

e contributed to the emergency o

f adolescent peer culture. From 1955 to 1975, t he adolescent population increased.

选取其中关键词：School reform efforts & the changes in population 即为答案。

83.此题依然为细节搜寻，根据名词定位法处理，线索如下：school students will s pend twice as much time with their peers as with adults. This gradual withdrawa l from adults begins in early adolescence. In sixth grade, adults ( excluding p arents ),挑选重点词汇：In early adolescence.

84. 此题是细节综合概括，同样先定位答案范围，再进行筛选: While childhood peer groups are conducted under the close supervision of parents, adolescent peer groups typica lly make an effort to escape adult supervision and usually succeed in doing so.答案可写为：Less close supervision of parents.